She burst onto the scene
of my life
bringing adventure,
joy,
love.
She left just as quickly,
leaving skid marks
across my heart.
Black marks
that I fear will never fade.
Thinking of her body,
her joviality,
our exploits,
my face becomes damp with tears
and my heartbeat is dampened
by sadness.
I try to be incensed,
to have fire in my heart,
but no such emotion can emerge
from the melancholy
which has taken up residence
in my soul.
Part of Three Word Wednesday CCXLI
Damp, incensed, skid
I love the image from the first stanza... sorry about your loss.
ReplyDeleteLove has a way of removig a skid mark that hurt has left o our hearts !!
ReplyDeleteLove the poem !
JL&B
A perfect picture of grief. I could see those skid marks across a heart. Great take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteoh this is so sad.
ReplyDeleteI liked the image of her leaving 'skid marks across my heart' - it follows on so well from her bursting into the narrator's life. Fully in character, I guess.
ReplyDeletebeautiful imagery...
ReplyDeletei could feel the loss!
thanks for sharing..
Beautiful, I love the imagery and can feel the sadness. Nice writing!
ReplyDeleteOh my, wonderfully written and just so sad. It's been said, but I could feel the loss in those words.
ReplyDeletewonderfully composed piece..in all meanings of the word 'composed'..Jae
ReplyDeleteLaurie - I'm glad it was so vivid for you
ReplyDeleteJL - what great advice
Nara- I'm glad it brought up the image I was imagining
Fear - love sometimes is
earlybird - thank you, I really enjoyed your comment.
Tarunima - I'm glad you were able to connect
Susannah - Thank you
Deborah - it's ok to repeat sometimes, thanks
jae - what a lovely comment, thank you so much
Sad, and poignant. You said it so well! Thanks for sharing, Jessica. It was something I could relate to!
ReplyDeleteWell said, especially when you want so badly to be hateful, angry, but all you feel is sadness.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful portrayal of a broken heart. Wonderful use of the words
ReplyDeleteMy submissions are Nightmares and Jealousy
Nicely done. I especially like this phrase: "She left just as quickly,
ReplyDeleteleaving skid marks
across my heart."
so beautifully sad...
ReplyDeleteMarks across the heart...sad but so beautifully expressed poem. Thank you for sharing.
ReplyDeleteOh! the depiction of sadness is uncanny, loved the last para, the sadness that has become so usual, that does not let be angry.
ReplyDeleteLeo - I love when people connect with my poems, thanks
ReplyDeleteMatt - well said
mind - thanks
Madeleine - that was the idea that started the peom, I'm glad you enjoyed it
amazing & Eclipse - thanks for appreciating the beauty
alive - I always hope people will understand and appreciate the feelings of the poem :-)